Bests & Worsts Reviews from Amazon

As an 11th grade creative writing assignment, this is an A+. As a published book, not so much. This book needs an editor. For example, she "peaked" over the table. Since this wasn't a sex scene, it should be "peeked". The girl was "self-diluted". I'm assuming she meant self-deluded? Otherwise it just means she drinks a lot of water, I guess. Everyone in the book talks like a teenager, so the characters are all pretty flat. There are also many punctuation errors. Personally, these things detract from my ability to enjoy a story.